One goodbye. Write the exact words that were said.
What happened when you said goodbye to someone?
Everyone gets the same subject. What differs is the follow-up: one question for children, two for teens, three for adults. Only the children's wording is simplified.
Pick one. A single idea taken all the way beats ten touched lightly.
Cut every “well, but”. The sentence stands up straight without them.
Cut at the conjunction. Where “and” or “so” appears, a period belongs.
Lose them in line one and the rest never happens.
The same ending three times in a row puts readers to sleep.
These words look like force. They take it away.