What actually happened after everyone agreed.
Have you wanted to speak and stayed quiet? When?
Everyone gets the same subject. What differs is the follow-up: one question for children, two for teens, three for adults. Only the children's wording is simplified.
Delete every line anyone could have written. What is left is yours.
Pick one. A single idea taken all the way beats ten touched lightly.
Cut every “well, but”. The sentence stands up straight without them.
One line against your own view makes the whole piece stronger.
'Last Tuesday' always beats 'sometimes'.
Say the conclusion first and the rest sorts itself out.